Mulogo Leyenda's Journal

[divey]

Day1
Today I met this beautiful lady named Yana! She is the most beautiful woman I have ever seen, I was even lucky enough to make friends with her and she gave me a little tour around Whitehold!

Day2
Today she showed me her home and she let me live with her ;D She showed me around her hometown which is larkwood and I met one of her neighbours! He was really kind and let Yana and me have a sleep over together.

Day3
We went to a cute little forest together today for a picnic and I asked if she wanted to go out with me, however she explained she had any just got her heart broken by this guy called James Web I was shocked but I told her your eyes twinkle like the stars your smile is as big as the sea and your personality is as bright as the sun and then we got together! It is the happiest day of my life!

Day4
Today we looked at new houses in Viventor and Whitehold but however on the way to whitehold we bumped into James I gave Yana my final kiss and said its obvious you still love him and said go with him, but remember i'll always love you... so she did without a second thought! My heart was broken I wanted her back so much so I kissed her again but then I got a slap and a brawl with James all I wanted is to have a happy life with Yana and this is what I get... I' ll always love Yana and I hope I can be friends with her again one day...

[Sable]

Perhaps invest in some punctuation and paragraphing? Walls of text are hard to read.

[DreXav]

Also, either the lady has lied about her name or you got it wrong. It's Yana =P

Good luck with your romantic feelings, ey.

[SyncOnari]

... For some reason I'm having Deja Vu.

[mds2014]

Woah, buddy. You need some serious help with writing...

Check around and maybe read other peoples biographies and characters. Also take Sable's idea...

Best wishes mate! =]

[fawnmiller]

yeah he spelled it wrong it Yana. Not my fault he feel in love with me

[divey]

Thanks guys, i've also updated it hope it's better now!

[Sable]

Paragraphing approved!

Punctuation still not perfect but its good enough

[divey]

Day 5
Today I bumped into her again and we made friends thankfully! But know I don't have to stay, but I found this homless shelter under the bridge of Whitehold so I guess i'm going to have to stay there.

Day 6
What Did I just do... Yana and me got a bit drunk and maybe had to much of a party last night and I snogged her... All I want is for her to have a happy life and I keep ruining it for her...

Day 7
Today I found my long lost brother Nick! I was shocked, I never knew I had one and I found out the people who look after me, arn't my real parents! After shock I bumped into Yana again... I had to explain to her what happend but she didn't want any of it. So I freaked out I didn't know what to do! So I may of attacked her and tied her up, i'm such an idiot I don't want it to end like this! So she ran to someones house and told the owner what happend, then he got loads of people to protect her. And one of them who was a mage kept setting me on fire! I want to have Yana back so much... I'm such an idiot.